Do you like this song i written?

I like this piece because its a clear story line(personally, Im not into that kind of music, i like songs were it isnt that clear and u picture and imagne everything) and it sounds like a cool song thats either rap or in the hip hop genre. I dont know if you're looking for this song to sound like that. But in my head when I try to sing this it sounds like it. Its pretty good because it dosent repeat itself alot. So its unique.